Wednesday, August 18, 2010

What's Happening Now?

Two weeks have passed since our last “What's Happening Now?” discussion, and I'm curious about what our characters have been up to lately.

Well, here it is – a chance for characters to reveal their current, or at least most recent, whereabouts. In this way, authors can share what's happening within their stories by speaking through their characters' unique voices.

So, let's hear it, guys, gals, and creatures! What have you done in the past two weeks? Experienced any stupendous places? Battled any horrendous beasts? Found yourself in a spot of trouble, supernatural or otherwise?

Feel free to spill any and all of your latest adventures, and hopefully, by revealing where you are in your story, you'll help inspire your authors to keep moving forward with theirs.

Remember, this is for characters only!


Candy said...

I'm still on my own as Author is coming down the homestretch with her novel, Token Child. From what I understand she has a bunch of folks trapped in Monument valley, all expecting to die within the next few days. Kendra is the main character and I like her, though she's pretty screwed up in some ways.Can't stand kids! Haven't a clue why, Something about her own being murdered by playmates. She almost goes postal when Sorrel appears. Cute little girl, not supposed to be there, but she is.
I leave Author alone so she'll hurry up and finish.

Nutmeg Cross said...

Yeah, I'm in a holding pattern, too, Candy. Author still busy with her travel guides...

Oh, well. Seems like everyone else is at a standstill, too. Or maybe they're just so busy they don't have time for CIC today. Hope they're having fun wherever they are!

Tommy Thurman said...

Hello, Donna,

Thank you for the update of "Two Minutes in Tomorrow."
On 2010-08-15, at 9:24 AM, Bill Bowler wrote:
> Don - Does this one need further reveiw?
Yes, I'm afraid it does. Some examples:
> “There are other ways of handling a bully, Peter,” Dad said.
> “He started it,” Peter wails.
The story can be told in either the past tense or the narrative present but not both at once ("said" vs. "wails"). Please check the story to correct other instances of narration in the present tense.
> “And you finished it, I know,” Dad said. Tommy pictured Dad shaking his head, his fingers crossed under his clean shaven chin. “We taught you better than this son.”
"his clean shaven chin" --> his clean-shaven chin
Compound adjectives take a linking hyphen.
“We taught you better than this son.” --> “We taught you better than this, son.”
Nouns or proper names used in direct address must be set off by a comma.

I once told that to a contributor who sent back the text with every single name set off by a comma, as in: "Hello," George, said.
Honestly, you'd be amazed...
> Tommy tried to focus on his unread book, but instead imagines his brother looking to Mom for help.
Tense confusion.
> “Honey; I can’t understand why you need to prove something to this boy.”
"Honey;" --> Honey,
Noun used in direct address; hence comma, not semicolon.

Donna, if you can correct those kinds of error throughout the text and send me a new version, I'll be glad to put it on the official schedule. The job shouldn't take long, but it will take very careful proofreading.

Nutmeg Cross said...


Candy said...

Who dat? Guess Donna's going to miss her critique!

Nutmeg Cross said...

Guess so, Candy. As for me, I'm still a little confused.

Tommy Thurman said...

Sorry ladies.

It means my author has some line edits to do and then I can get published.

Keep your fingers crossed for me.

Nutmeg Cross said...

Oops. Got it. Finger crossed, Tommy.

Teddy said...

Now that i learned that my best friend Jacky likes the same guy I do.I feel like my friend betaid me.she could have told me but she decided to not.We could have got to a conclusion and decided something.But insted she have seen him trough my back,and also i cant belive that that ivan didnt event told me about what was happening.I dont know what to do now everithing is going to wrong the two people i love have betraide me...

-Judith c. (R6)